The Gate

I was walking with a friend when he suddenly stopped. "Describe that."

I looked to where he was pointing. "What?"

"That." He touched a blue plastic tie attached to a gate. "I want to see how your author eyes see it."

"So this is a test?" 

"No, it's curiosity." After a moment of me staring at him, he rolled his eyes. "Okay, I'll go first."

This I had to see—or hear, as it were. Crossing my arms, I nodded. "Go ahead."

"The metal gate was rusted," he began without a beat of thought. "Beyond it, there was a door and a sterile looking entrance to a mediocre looking house. On the gate, there was a blue tie." He grinned at me. "Your turn."

Frowning, I looked at the door. I've never been an oral storyteller. Somehow words didn't flow from my mind to my mouth—they went directly to my fingertips. But I'm not one to run away from a challenge, so I went for it. "Every time she saw the blue tie, she thought of him, and it drove her crazy."

"Really?" my friend said.

"Shut up and let me tell my story," I said in my usual sweet way. He made a sign like he was zipping his lips, and when I was I sure he was going to stay quiet, I started again. "Every time she saw the blue tie, she thought of him, and it drove her crazy. She knew he put it there on purpose, so she'd have to think of him. So she'd be reminded of the vivid blue of his eyes, so she'd think of the way he looked at her, like he wanted to strip her clothes and wallow in her body. Right now, she looked at the blue tie as she let herself into her home and thought about the way his hands glided over her. She scowled. She would NOT call him tonight. She'd sworn she was going to play it cool. But her fingers brushed the tie as she closed the gate, and she knew she wouldn't be able to resist."

The sound of waves crashing filled the silence when I stopped talking. My friend and I stared at the tie, not speaking. Then he said, "Have you ever considered being a romance writer? I have a feeling you might be okay at it."

Posted by Kate on 14 September 2010

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  • I want to hear more of that story!

    Posted by JB Lynn, 14/09/2010 7:20am (2 years ago)

  • Me too! I also want to give it my own shot... This is darker than usual, but that's because my roomie has me hooked on NCIS.

    The jingling of her keys vaguely told her how much her hands shook. The awareness was only in the back of her mind, though - The blue zip tie on her front gate took up the rest of her mental capacity. It looked common enough, but she'd zipped enough blue ties to enough front gates to know what it meant. For one thing, she was fired... Big time. Fired, and if she wasn't careful from here on out, fired -at-. The simple blue tie, bright against the half-rusted gate, said "We like you enough to let you get your things in order before we kill you". It meant her clock was ticking.

    It also meant her husband was dead.

    Posted by Karen, 14/09/2010 9:03am (2 years ago)

  • JB, I was going to suggest you running with it, but there are no dead bodies in it. ;)

    Karen! That was awesome! I'd wondered if anyone else would try. I'm happy you did.

    Posted by Kate, 14/09/2010 10:13am (2 years ago)

  • Karen took care of the dead body!

    Posted by JB Lynn, 15/09/2010 7:24am (2 years ago)

  • She stepped up, didn't she? I was impressed. Obviously we've had a positive influence on her.

    Posted by Kate, 15/09/2010 9:51am (2 years ago)

  • You got all that from the blue tie? Did you ever think that your friend put it on the fence so he could ask you to talk sexy to him? Maybe, you were set up.

    Either way, good one.

    Hope you're having a great time these days.

    Posted by Bradley, 16/09/2010 7:22pm (2 years ago)

  • Good point, Bradley. He'd be the type of guy who'd go to the trouble. He totally set me up. ;)

    (This is where I wait for the outraged text from my friend. Although he may not say anything for fear of me blogging about it.)

    Posted by Kate, 17/09/2010 1:16am (2 years ago)

  • You may not hear from him for a while, he's got plenty of material to keep him occupied. :)

    Posted by Bradley, 17/09/2010 12:23pm (2 years ago)

  • No, it's had the opposite effect--he keeps coming back for more. Just call me Scheherazade.

    Posted by Kate, 17/09/2010 7:43pm (2 years ago)

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